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(Contains: sexual themes)
Last night when he pushed me up against the vanity,
he created this yellow tension in me. i don't
think he even tried to escape biology, he just
strung me and stretched me out
like a ribbon in a book,
and he's just got this look like sing for me, baby.

i'd been coexisting with my diaphragm up until now
when he showed me how easy
easy could be, like
counting the years between him and me

[it goes hut one, hut two, hut thirty]. He
drenched me in wine and took a good, hard look
at all the lines of which my body's comprised and
now i don't think it could elude his eyes
if i wanted it to. It's like
he's got me feeling and i don't know what to do;
he wants to hold me down and show me what he can do
but the half light's half choked me,
soaking me in this jaundiced glow [he should
really slow me down, he should really
go slow.]

He's drinking my skin and i'm here thinking he
puts the sub in sublime, one moment he's spitting out
his contagious english [benign enabler of my
childish anguish]
and the next he's gasped "baby" too many times. But
he's privy to my former self, when i was slung deep
into the earth on the sides of my little girl feet,
past arches and posture, into warm and graceless sexuality.
He must have tasted that in me, he must
know how i can be.
mildly sickening.

edit: WOW thank you all so much for your feedback. It is tremendously appreciated.
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Given 2013-09-17
Lolita. by ~AntoinetteGiulia is a vividly ugly portrayal of a hideous act that toes the line between vilifying the perpetrator and the victim. ( Suggested by UnspecifiedUnknown and Featured by Nichrysalis )
:iconmagdalenacaracol:
I love this a lot <3
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PatternVSUser Sep 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I love the way this bounces easy language and metaphores and the the unique way you describe certain things ("contagious english", "yellow tension").
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Concora Sep 17, 2013   Writer
This is incredible spoken word. The rhythm is just divine. 
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:icondarkheroic:
darkheroic Sep 17, 2013  Professional Interface Designer
grats on the DD
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TheDovahBrine Sep 17, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Funny thing... The song Lolita by The Veronicas came on while I was reading this... I'm also a Lolita. Everything fits together.
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:iconkr8t0s:
Very very sensual
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:iconshadowedacolyte:
This is rich with imagery. My brain filled in all the necessary sights and sounds and smells, which means the underlying details were just right. Thanks for sharing, and congrats!
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MissManz Sep 17, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
I don't see any pedophilia in this, so why the warning?... Am I missing something?
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Nichrysalis Sep 17, 2013  Student Writer
The title is an allusion to the notable novel Lolita, whose main character of the same (nick)name is a young girl who has been forced into an incestuous relationship with her stepfather. More than that though, there are quite a few places in the poem that help to give an overall idea of the situation described, especially the last stanza.
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:iconlitetheironman:
it's not forced. the stepdaughter becomes sexually curious and begins a relationship with her stepfather. in the Kubrick film, her age is changed so she's slightly older than she was in the novel
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